Based on what I’ve read on the short story that my classmate wrote, it is a story about, the Important role of a family in everyone’s life, from the childhood days until to the adulthood days and until each and every one have a family of their own. And if I will summarize the short story on my own word, the story focus on Addy the main character in the story she is a 4th year college student in the University of the East and she is taking up Bachelor of Secondary Education Major in English. Addy lived together with her family and she is a kind, smart and she is also a loving daughter.
Addy has a boyfriend which is her school mate and they done a thing that they will gonna regret someday, she is having a sex with his boyfriend Dave not just once but trice and because of that Addy got pregnant at the young age she didn’t finished her studies because of what happened that’s why their parents decided that Addy and her boy friend must be married as soon as possible for the sake of the child and the days pass Addy’s husband cheat her with some other woman even they have a child a baby boy child and because of that Addy decided to get separate with her husband Dave. She file an annulment and years pass by after Addy’s husband shown in their life again and he try to get his son to her mother but Addy did not allow that to happen because of that her ex husband try to get his child with force, he go to the school of his son and get their son without permission of Addy. Because of that Addy file a case and she got her son back to her, and the consequences is her exhusband got in prison for about 4 years.
After 5 years Addy finished her studies and graduated and have a job outside the country and when she have enough saving she got back to the Philippines for her son and with a new husband after that a co incidence happened in a mall Addy and her son with her new Husband go shopping and Addy saw her Ex husband with his new family also and because of that Addy decided to forget her Ex husband completely because she wants a new happy life with her son and new husband and to her family that never leave her inspite of all the problems that she encountered.
When it comes to the characters it is totally okay but there is an information that is not cleared for me like on the photocopy notes that I’ve read like Ding he supposed to be Characterize as the husband of Ila, but instead he was characterize as a 51 years old and a Officer in a military but when you completely read the story he is the husband of Ila. The author Must be careful when writing the description of the characters, she must clarify the characters of Everyone in the story, she must put the right description on each in everyone character’s for the Readers totally understand the flow of the short story easily. And also I’ve Seen the character’s Miaca, Mhel and Cindy I think they don’t have a big roll on the story Because they only seen once on the whole story at the mall.
The author must emphasis the character usages on a story if you put them on the character description and if you do not do that I prefer not to put too many characters if they can’t seen them well more than three times in the whole story. I think it is better in the story that Maica, Mhel and Cindy are there in times Addys needs a friends to lean on and to help Addy to be more positive in her life and to give more encouragement to their friend Addy that even we encounter many problems in life we need to be strong to surpass this problems in everyone’s life that this is not the end we need to fight and help yourself to move forward.
For me Addy is a strong person a woman with a strong personality to face the real life. She try her best to finish her studies with the support of her parents even though she has already a son We all know that it is very hard to the mother to raise a child without a father. But Here in her case Addy learned that maybe it is time for her to have a real partner in life in rising Her child. About Dave the father of the child and an ex husband of Addy, Dave is so Irresponsible father. And unfaithful to Addy. He has another girl the main reason of their Separation and Dave has another family.
When it comes to the plot, actually I think the author must used a very attracting events for she can attract the emotion of a reader because when you attract the emotion of the reader you can easily get their attention because for me when I define plot it is the special events or important events in the story or else it is the make up in the story. And when it comes to the plot of the author.
I think she used very common events like friends talking in the mall or family having a shopping at the mall and it is very usual nowadays , I think if she used a very cool events in a cool real world she can attract a very strong costumer. And I remember she used the mall for the place where she and their friends can hang out but for me I can refer to the author that if she wants to be an extraordinary she must used a place where everybody can relate I refer Boracay or in other beautiful places and views here in our country because it is a tourist spot of the Philippines.
I think the author want us to be more oriented because nowadays lots of people is having trouble with their love ones like on their girlfriends and boyfriends and also the author looks like a very family oriented person because from the title itself “The watery eyes”. I think that this short story is based on her real life. But even though that she did all of that there are still more, she must start it with a little problem and not a big problem because the readers will be disappointed if they found that the story is so exaggerated because in the story Addy got pregnant at that short of time.
And also I think she doesn’t right down something like the husband and a wife can easily separate because if the readers can read it there is a big tendency that the can break a heart so easily Actually, I am not that so happy because Addy and Dave did not lived happily ever after even That they have a son, because they do a horrible thing that they regret it someday and the author must right a very inspirational story to every readers that every problems that comes there is always a solution for that so don’t lose hope.
And if I am gonna rate it I do gave a score of 88 % because I know that she did her best to right down the story but it is not perfect after all. And after I reading the story I can relate a little bit because I do have a boyfriend but a little bit only because I didn’t encounter a problem like Addy faced, but when it comes to family of Addy I really remember my family of mine because like the family of Addy my family also Is so caring and understanding and they never lived me alone even I do and we do encounter a family problems and we as a family will gonna make a solution in our problem even it is a very horrible problem but I see that the author did not mention God in the story, because a kind of story of this must have the presence of God because in real life people must be with God anytime even thou that you are a very busy person, and also if you want to catch up the thought of the readers the author must give an inspirational lessons with the presence of God because in reality if a person do encounter a problem even though what kind of a problem it is a person will always beg for the help and mercy of our God.
And when it comes to the grammar I think the author must practice more to right and specially to speak in English because when I do read the whole story there is a lot of sentence I found that the grammar is wrong and also the construction of the sentence the author must also Learn more how to construct a sentence and also the spelling of the words, some of the words in the story is not in appropriate spelling. I do have a proof that the author have an error when it comes to grammar like on the last page or part of the story that the author wrote she have stated a line there were Chie the brother of Addy said that “chie was also happy because his sister not to be weak but to be strong enough to carry the problem.” If you read that form of sentence you can also notice that it is not right for me I think it will be appropriate if the author will right like in this form “Chie was also very happy for her sister, because he can see that her sister is more strong enough and matured enough to face any kind of problems in her life” and that is the right term for me to wrote that line. But over all of the story was Ok to me and as I read the story I can relate the story on the television show’s like the Teleserye’s, but as a say always there is no perfect story because there is no perfect person but anyone can make it closer to perfect.
Addy has a boyfriend which is her school mate and they done a thing that they will gonna regret someday, she is having a sex with his boyfriend Dave not just once but trice and because of that Addy got pregnant at the young age she didn’t finished her studies because of what happened that’s why their parents decided that Addy and her boy friend must be married as soon as possible for the sake of the child and the days pass Addy’s husband cheat her with some other woman even they have a child a baby boy child and because of that Addy decided to get separate with her husband Dave. She file an annulment and years pass by after Addy’s husband shown in their life again and he try to get his son to her mother but Addy did not allow that to happen because of that her ex husband try to get his child with force, he go to the school of his son and get their son without permission of Addy. Because of that Addy file a case and she got her son back to her, and the consequences is her exhusband got in prison for about 4 years.
After 5 years Addy finished her studies and graduated and have a job outside the country and when she have enough saving she got back to the Philippines for her son and with a new husband after that a co incidence happened in a mall Addy and her son with her new Husband go shopping and Addy saw her Ex husband with his new family also and because of that Addy decided to forget her Ex husband completely because she wants a new happy life with her son and new husband and to her family that never leave her inspite of all the problems that she encountered.
When it comes to the characters it is totally okay but there is an information that is not cleared for me like on the photocopy notes that I’ve read like Ding he supposed to be Characterize as the husband of Ila, but instead he was characterize as a 51 years old and a Officer in a military but when you completely read the story he is the husband of Ila. The author Must be careful when writing the description of the characters, she must clarify the characters of Everyone in the story, she must put the right description on each in everyone character’s for the Readers totally understand the flow of the short story easily. And also I’ve Seen the character’s Miaca, Mhel and Cindy I think they don’t have a big roll on the story Because they only seen once on the whole story at the mall.
The author must emphasis the character usages on a story if you put them on the character description and if you do not do that I prefer not to put too many characters if they can’t seen them well more than three times in the whole story. I think it is better in the story that Maica, Mhel and Cindy are there in times Addys needs a friends to lean on and to help Addy to be more positive in her life and to give more encouragement to their friend Addy that even we encounter many problems in life we need to be strong to surpass this problems in everyone’s life that this is not the end we need to fight and help yourself to move forward.
For me Addy is a strong person a woman with a strong personality to face the real life. She try her best to finish her studies with the support of her parents even though she has already a son We all know that it is very hard to the mother to raise a child without a father. But Here in her case Addy learned that maybe it is time for her to have a real partner in life in rising Her child. About Dave the father of the child and an ex husband of Addy, Dave is so Irresponsible father. And unfaithful to Addy. He has another girl the main reason of their Separation and Dave has another family.
When it comes to the plot, actually I think the author must used a very attracting events for she can attract the emotion of a reader because when you attract the emotion of the reader you can easily get their attention because for me when I define plot it is the special events or important events in the story or else it is the make up in the story. And when it comes to the plot of the author.
I think she used very common events like friends talking in the mall or family having a shopping at the mall and it is very usual nowadays , I think if she used a very cool events in a cool real world she can attract a very strong costumer. And I remember she used the mall for the place where she and their friends can hang out but for me I can refer to the author that if she wants to be an extraordinary she must used a place where everybody can relate I refer Boracay or in other beautiful places and views here in our country because it is a tourist spot of the Philippines.
I think the author want us to be more oriented because nowadays lots of people is having trouble with their love ones like on their girlfriends and boyfriends and also the author looks like a very family oriented person because from the title itself “The watery eyes”. I think that this short story is based on her real life. But even though that she did all of that there are still more, she must start it with a little problem and not a big problem because the readers will be disappointed if they found that the story is so exaggerated because in the story Addy got pregnant at that short of time.
And also I think she doesn’t right down something like the husband and a wife can easily separate because if the readers can read it there is a big tendency that the can break a heart so easily Actually, I am not that so happy because Addy and Dave did not lived happily ever after even That they have a son, because they do a horrible thing that they regret it someday and the author must right a very inspirational story to every readers that every problems that comes there is always a solution for that so don’t lose hope.
And if I am gonna rate it I do gave a score of 88 % because I know that she did her best to right down the story but it is not perfect after all. And after I reading the story I can relate a little bit because I do have a boyfriend but a little bit only because I didn’t encounter a problem like Addy faced, but when it comes to family of Addy I really remember my family of mine because like the family of Addy my family also Is so caring and understanding and they never lived me alone even I do and we do encounter a family problems and we as a family will gonna make a solution in our problem even it is a very horrible problem but I see that the author did not mention God in the story, because a kind of story of this must have the presence of God because in real life people must be with God anytime even thou that you are a very busy person, and also if you want to catch up the thought of the readers the author must give an inspirational lessons with the presence of God because in reality if a person do encounter a problem even though what kind of a problem it is a person will always beg for the help and mercy of our God.
And when it comes to the grammar I think the author must practice more to right and specially to speak in English because when I do read the whole story there is a lot of sentence I found that the grammar is wrong and also the construction of the sentence the author must also Learn more how to construct a sentence and also the spelling of the words, some of the words in the story is not in appropriate spelling. I do have a proof that the author have an error when it comes to grammar like on the last page or part of the story that the author wrote she have stated a line there were Chie the brother of Addy said that “chie was also happy because his sister not to be weak but to be strong enough to carry the problem.” If you read that form of sentence you can also notice that it is not right for me I think it will be appropriate if the author will right like in this form “Chie was also very happy for her sister, because he can see that her sister is more strong enough and matured enough to face any kind of problems in her life” and that is the right term for me to wrote that line. But over all of the story was Ok to me and as I read the story I can relate the story on the television show’s like the Teleserye’s, but as a say always there is no perfect story because there is no perfect person but anyone can make it closer to perfect.
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